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The Horror Heritage in bits!

 As you certainly know, The Horror Heritage is the working title of the manuscript I worked on during the month of November. It is set in Sonrisa, the fantasy world I’ve been working on for six years now!

Although I decided to share with you a tiny bit of it, it’s far from finished.

I’ll discuss in a future post on the difficulties of the rest of the task, but what I want to do here is fulfil the promise I made in the previous blog.

I’m going to go through the part of the manuscript I’ve written so far and I’ll past and copy the bits I love more for the moment.

This would be useful to me because in the haste of the challenge, I wrote the chapters and I have just a general idea of what I written, in other words I remember just a tiny bit of the whole lot.

NOTE: BEING A MANUSCRIPT…NO WORSE, A NANOMANUSCRIPT THE FOLLOWING EXCEPRETS WILL BE FULL OF ERRORS AND ILLOGIC THINGS, SO DON’T MIND THEM. I’D HIGHLY APPRECIATE THOUGH AN OPINION ABOUT THE STORY AND THE CHARACTERS.

 

Let’s start with the opening.

I’m finally here, dear brother, this time I’m going to stay with you a bit longer.

This is what I’ve been thinking since last element, exactly when I decided what I wanted to do with my life.

I visited Sweet Moment before but climbing the coloured stone steps this time is different.

I’m eager to see Dan once again. I hope he’s happy to see me too! He hasn’t come home for two cycles now and last time I visited this place I didn’t manage to meet him.

This is one of the reasons why I’m here now: I want to stay with my twin.

I even stopped to write him letters, he didn’t answer anyway.

And finally on the last violet step here he is, Dan is smiling greeting the customers entering before me.

I put my best smile on, open my arms and I walk towards him.

When he sees me his smile dissolves from his face and his eyes reach the bag on my shoulder.

“Fran, what on earth…” he says and he stretches his arm out.

SLAP!

He hits me with all his strength. There is a lot of sadness and tension in our eyes.

“Why are you here?” he asks.

 

***

Here Fran and Aisolar are waiting to be shown their dormitory.

 

“Do you think it’s going further down this place?” I ask Aisolar looking around. The ceiling seems very tall.

“I don’t know” she says and keeps looking around like me “Anyway this place is so dark, it would need some light more!” she adds.

I can only nod in agreement.

Immediately after she touches her hair and detaches some bits that can be defined as locks and throw them in the air around her.

For a while she’s surrounded by little tongues of fire. Then she blows on them and they grow giving more light to the surrounding area of the room.

“Wow this is amazing!” I say clapping my hands.

“Oh you’re so easy to impress, Fran” she says “Look, you’ll like this!”

She opens her arms and the flames spread around lightening an even bigger area of the room.

I’m still in awe when I see that the flames are popping and disappearing one by one.

“This shouldn’t happen” Aisolar says surprised.

In that moment Ky opens the door again and yells at us “Are you crazy?”

We look at one another puzzled.

“It was so dark that we wanted to get it a bit more lit!” Aisolar says.

“You shouldn’t have!”

“Why!?”

“Because only approved magic can work here!” he says looking around where the two lifts were.

***

 

 

Here is a scene from the training.

 

We enter in Funny Jungle huge vegetation and we follow the path. It’s very damp in here but the coloured flowers are amazing to see.

I notice that Clanny is looking around, I cannot be mistaken, and she’s clearly looking for something or someone.

At the sample table we don’t see anybody and I feel it shouldn’t be like it.

Clanny looks around and above her head and eventually, following her gaze, I see a girl from the Monkey tribe attached at the highest branch of the tree by her tail. She’s swinging and smiling at us.

“Oops!” she says and jumps down in front of us with a perfect movement.

“Monko!” Clanny shouts “This is the second warning you receive, am I understood?”

The girl called Monko far from looking worried, smiles at us again and resumes her place behind the counter. Her bright blue eyes have a sparkle that attracts me.

“Nothing to watch here anymore! Keep going!” Clanny says.

I stare at Monko till I’m out of the door and I notice only now that her hair and fur glitter under the light and I realize that it’s the golden colour letting this magic of light to happen.

This leaves me in awe as I’ve never seen even in books, but only heard as one of Funny Jungle legends, something concerning golden and silver furred monkeys.

 

***

Another scene from the training.

Clanny guides us through the great hall and bring us at the reception of the Inn and behind the counter there is an older gentleman who’s doing nothing but staring at the door.

“Here you have Hilman, he’s one of our best staff members. As you can see his ready attitude to spot the customers is appreciated by all the management!”

Hilman is very tall person, very pale and skinny. His face is impassive and if I had blood and vein, my blood would chill! He nod in greeting to Clanny who reply with a small movement of her hand and turns to guide us back to the lifts.

I keep watching Hilman, in truth because I don’t trust his face and I realize that as soon as Clanny is turned he sticks his tongue out at her, then winks at me and smile. He has very pointed teeth. Of course, he’s a vampire. I think he must come from Ghost Land though.

***

One of the scenes after the training.

 

I let myself fall on a huge pillow in front of the fire and I stare into the flames, I feel exhausted. Of course I wanted to look for Dan but I don’t think is a good idea right now. If he was on shift this morning is likely to be over soon.

Lost in my thoughts I barely realize that Aisolar goes on her knees and then sits in front of me and then lies down putting her head into the cracking flames.

“Are you mental?” I shout jumping on my feet.

She looks at me from there and smiles. I don’t understand for the first three seconds and then I realize.

“Ok, your hair is made of fire, but still, why are you putting your head into the mantelpiece?”

“I’m relaxing. The flames are massaging my head as well and nourishing my hair. After that period into the blue section I really needed!” she says.

Exactly in the same moment the other elementals we noticed before drag themselves into the living room and do the very same thing. I move aside to let them recreate their hair. Aisolar as well make room for them.

 

***

 

Dan tells Fran part of the situation.

 

“Dan why we didn’t receive any message? What is going on!?”

“I’m not entirely sure, but what I know it’s a mistake that you came over here!”

“Why?! It’s not a problem!” I say raising a bit the tone “Tomorrow I’m going to talk with Clanny and tell her I don’t want to work here anymore, and you know what? You do the same. I mean, we came here to make experience, right? We can just change our plan and start to travel before we intended. I cannot see the problem!” I rise on my feet. Everything is set and now I feel starving so I move to the door once again.

Dan grabs my hand, he’s still sitting down, and he stares into my eyes “Fran, we can’t! You don’t understand…we can’t go out of here…we’re not allowed. Once you’re here, you don’t move!”

I smile, I think to one of his jokes. I have to admit that this one is very well said and if he’s trying to improve his acting skill he’s made progresses.

“I’m not joking.” he says.

Dan’s eyes are deeper now, he keeps staring at me and his grasp goes tighter.

“Why are you saying that?”

“Because it’s the truth. You can ask anybody and if they’re willing to do so, they’ll confirm the problem” he says “Why do you think I haven’t visited my house, although not far from here, for two cycles solid?”

 

 

All right, I have a small problem, all these parts are from chapter one only.

Let’s do something, let me know what you think about that and if you want me to go on.

Of course negative feedbacks are also accepted, only when constructive!

Thanks for your time and cooperation!

Talk to you soon! 

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